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LJI: No Comment

I was born with what my grannies called a snaggletooth.

When they said "Bite your tongue, girl," I did.

I tasted copper.  Sometimes the blood would fill my mouth as I tried to swallow, swallow the words.

I never knew it was just an old saying.  You didn't actually have to bite your tongue.

But I learned that it meant silence.  That is the important part.

The questions were pointed, just like my tooth.  I learned it hurts less to shake your head than to open your mouth and show the blood and the paragraphs of accusations unspokened.

I'm older now.

And they come to ask me.  Now it's all the shows and the questions and the innuendo.

I chew my lip in my sleep.  I don't mean to.  But I wake up to a pillow with blood and tears.

They ask me questions.

I can still feel the hand clapped over my mouth, my tooth drawing blood as it killed my words.

I smile.  I give my offering, my only words.  "No comment."

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ghost_light
Feb. 6th, 2017 05:56 am (UTC)
This is wonderful!
baxaphobia
Feb. 6th, 2017 03:23 pm (UTC)
Staying quiet is so difficult at times! I could relate to this!
nucleosides
Feb. 7th, 2017 01:27 am (UTC)

*hugs*

weebleswobble
Feb. 7th, 2017 03:22 am (UTC)
oh! oh. theres so much more to it then you've just subtlety implied. MOAR. and you captured that.

Edited at 2017-02-07 03:22 am (UTC)
penpusher
Feb. 7th, 2017 06:40 pm (UTC)
It is, oftentimes the most challenging thing we can do - the figurative biting of the tongue, and you brought out the fact that it might just be as painful as the literal version!
my_name_is_jenn
Feb. 7th, 2017 09:55 pm (UTC)
This was so beautifully written.
rayaso
Feb. 10th, 2017 03:35 pm (UTC)
I loved equating "no comment" with "bite your tongue." The first is usually said by somebody, while the second is said to someone. This was quite well done!
alycewilson
Feb. 13th, 2017 12:55 am (UTC)
Great use of allusion: hints of violence and fear.
halfshellvenus
Feb. 13th, 2017 03:56 am (UTC)
it hurts less to shake your head than to open your mouth and show the blood and the paragraphs of accusations unspokened.
Such a vivid description-- and holding it back and having others know you're doing it is harder somehow than just pretending there's nothing to say.

If you speak and no one does anything... how do you reconcile that? Sometimes, when you say nothing you don't have to confront that possibility.
marlawentmad
Feb. 14th, 2017 11:44 pm (UTC)

I felt those lines deeply.

sinnamongirl
Feb. 13th, 2017 08:58 am (UTC)
Holy cow, you did so much with so few words. Excellent work!
mamas_minion
Feb. 14th, 2017 03:52 am (UTC)
Beautifully done
murielle
Feb. 16th, 2017 02:48 pm (UTC)
You had me from the very first line! I grew up hearing, "bite your tongue," too.

Kudos!
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